Written by Mathew Naismith
This is interesting, I asked my step daughter to edit my short
story titled A Wise Man Wise, the complexities within spiritualism soon revealed
itself to a person who has little interest in spirituality. My writing skills
are often limited & flawed, so to speak, which made Karla’s task even
harder, however this didn’t account for the misunderstandings within what I was
trying to relay. Are spiritually aware people often taken in the wrong way
because they think differently?
For anyone to edit anything not of their own thinking pattern
would have to be a momentous task, I thought Karla actually did a good job of
editing my story under the circumstances. If Karla wishes to study in
publishing & editing, I suppose Karla has got to learn to think outside of
her normal thinking pattern. With all
the syntax errors within my writing & the way I think would have to be a
very good experience for my step daughter.
G’day Karla
You haven’t over
edited my short storey at all Karla however, like with the title, spirituality has
it’s own language. The title (A wise man wise) for example refers to two people
being wise but also refers to the wise man being wiser. Spirituality has a lot
of paradoxes & double meanings that is why a lot of people don’t understand
what spirituality is actually about.
Take a look at the bible
for instance, how many paradoxes & double/triple meanings can a single
paragraph have, now if we looked at the bible as a whole it looks even more contradictory
& confusing?
The reason I used
wondering is because again it has a double meaning & this is why non-spiritually
aware people don’t quite get where most spiritually aware people are coming
from. Philosophy is just as perplexing, that is why a lot of people just can’t
be bothered sorting out all the perplexities within philosophy.
Yes there is no
context from the start, I did that deliberately. Spirituality has no set point
& shouldn’t be dictated to by time, giving the story a set background fixates
the story to time, I didn’t want that.
The word poised was
used to denote composed, graceful & calm in relation to the village, it was
to set the mood to what’s about to come also the wise man will also see a
composed nature as opposed to what is normally seen by lesser wise person.
Stopping to ponder for
a spiritually wise person without explaining why goes along with why a wise
person would stop & ponder; this comes back again to time. Time gives us
reason & separation however thinking in timelessness, there is no reasoning
or separation, the wise man just stopped & pondered looking upon the village
in the valley. The reason of course materialised when the man from the village
appeared.
I have taken on a number
of your suggestions however I have retained certain original text for a reason.
Thanks for taking the time & effort Karla, I hope this hasn’t put you off
editing my stuff.
Love
Mat
PS I have sent you
back a revised addition of my short story, please feel free to make any other
suggestions & corrections.
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